Last elevator pitch, I was not looking at the camera directly enough, and not engaging enough. I also took too long to get to my main point. In this pitch, I tried to keep everything concise while relating to people who are watching and offering a solution to the problem. Overall, I think all of the feedback I got was good and can definitely keep improving on these in the future.
Hey, I liked how you related the issue of traffic back to yourself. The pitch really resonated with me as I totally have this issue. You already have me sold on why the product would be a good idea and that there is a demand, but I think it might be good if you could go into detail about how better traffic lights would make money. Investors would want to know how they are going to make a return on their investment. Overall though, great job!
ReplyDeleteI really like how you brought up your solution and problem into this pitch. You also did a very nice job presenting your details. However, I think that you should speak up more and provide more gestures! I do see the point you are getting at with this, but if you provide more enthusiasm you can definitely sell your product! Otherwise, great job, as always.
ReplyDeleteHey Ben,
ReplyDeleteGood job on your second elevator pitch, I believe that you did an even better job on this one then your first pitch. Overall, you made good eye contact and were clear with your speech. This lets the viewers get a better feel for your business and what type of person you are. Great job and believe that your idea could help millions of lives spend less time in traffic.
Hi Ben,
ReplyDeleteSame as last time, I think that your stance and your outfit choice are great for portraying your professionalism. I also think that your speech was very clear and you definitely made improvements with eye contact and communicating directly with your audience. Overall, great job.
Ben,
ReplyDeleteIt's great to see you did a better job than your last elevator pitch. I know you were sick when you did your last video, so it's good to see your improvement. You did a good job on the eye contact, and you are calm when you give all the details about your opportunity in a limited time. Great work!
Hey Ben,
ReplyDeleteI see some real improvements with this elevator pitch. I feel as though it flowed much better and it was very easy to get involved. Your speaking skills are definitely improving. Hope to see your product on the market soon because I think it would save so much time while commuting in Gainesville, not to mention all of the road rage.